this essay need to be edait, this what the teacher told me what it need to be edit in the essay.
“excellent job comparing the two phones but it still doesn’t seem to focus on the advertisement much. Does the ad mention all of these spec differences or is this just information that you researched? The essay should be less about the product and more about how Apple is marketing the product in an advertisement.”
the essay(I phone 7) in the attachments .